Thursday, September 15, 2011

Emanating Emily

This is much like the "Wording Whitman" post.... but with Emily Dickinson's work instead. Again the same idea of understanding style was explored. Also with this poet punctuation and its functions where brought to light in many respects. Personally I believe that Dickinson is a wonderfully brilliant poet and a pleasure to read but rather difficult to copy. She is nothing if not unique.



Children?

I am child. How old are you?
Are you a child too?
Are you and I - a we?
Shhh - we’re hiding.

Oh - responsibility. Being an adult
O - innocent beliefs falling fading fleeting
To wake and work-the long day
To pause resting no more.
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  1. Ann HostetlerSeptember 18, 2011 at 10:52 PM

    I really like the rhyme of "we" and "responsibility" that links the two stanzas. It feels like you could use another syllable in the second to last line--"the long long day" perhaps. And it seems the line should pause a bit after "pause" in the last line--maybe something like "to pause, then rest no more." But what is pausing? It seems like everything in adult life is continual work.

    Good play with Dickinson style. But I'd love to hear what you learned about Dickinson through this exercise.

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